Microfiction challenge #24: Moonlit night

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painting by Iliya Repin

THIS WEEK’S WORDS come from “Take Your Kids to the Funeral” by Michelle Boisseau: valves, church, coughs, weirdness, liturgy, furtive, kids, smell, heads, dabbing, swinging, scissors

reflection from the moon as she waited
and the dog dabbed his mouth in the water
liturgy of wait as the sky’s clouded

she coughed in the cold evening but hung on
the dog swung his head, might have heard some sound
coming from the mountain and forest yon

it might be furtive but she’s always here
in her best coat and beret every night
just in case he might show up and appear

the church bell’s ringing, people coming out
kids in their best clothes making such a fuss
the smell of the trees and the night fade-out

the lady and the dog went home tonight
and the liturgy of wait continues
until he comes back, on their moonlit night

(c) ladyleemanila 2016

For: Microfiction challenge #24: Moonlit night by Jane Dougherty, Whirligig 87 by Magical Mystical Teacher

9 Comments

  1. Love some of the phrasing her – ‘the liturgy of wait’ is unusual but I know exactly what you mean. I love the stanza with people leaving the church and the kids fussing – such a good rhythm. Really good 🙂

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  2. Hi lady, I enjoyed your take on the prompt, quite different a unique one I think. Just a little nit the word “hanged” threw me made me go back and try again should it have been ” hung”?
    I hope you don’t mind me pointing it out sometimes a tiny change can keep it smooth. Happy Sunday. 😇

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