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    for what sense it is when he’s gone

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    for what sense it is when he’s gone
    not even a trace seen from path
    I keep hearing his voice at dawn
    aloud in a whisper – be gone!
    and I used to have what he hath
    for what sense it is when he’s gone

    (c) ladyleemanila 2017

    For: Quadrille #24 by whimsygizmo

    29 responses to “for what sense it is when he’s gone”

    1. ladyleemanila

      hi Rosemary, I usually just pick one from the list and try it out, whatever the name is…have a lovely Sunday 🙂

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    2. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

      I like the form!

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      1. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

        (I can’t find it on poetic form sites amongst recorded variations of sestets. Is it your own invention? Does it have a name? I’d quite like to play with this too.

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        1. ladyleemanila

          http://www.shadowpoetry.com/index.html – that’s the site I always use, so cool!

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      2. ladyleemanila

        thank you, Rosemary 🙂

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        1. Rosemary Nissen-Wade

          Yes,that’s a good site. But I can see what the form is; I just wondered if it was already recognised and named. The site is no help in finding that out; I would have to know the name already to search it. Other sites which do list things under types of sestets don’t include this, so I thought it might be your own variation. And then I would credit you when using it.

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    3. ladyleemanila

      thank you, C.C. 🙂

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    4. C.C.

      The contradiction of ‘aloud in a whisper’ really hits home the sense of loss.

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    5. Shamsud Ahmed

      It is short and sharp. Some words of loss and and saw the warmth in Whisper. Brilliantly done

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      1. ladyleemanila

        thanks, Shamsud 🙂

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    6. frankhubeny

      I liked the repetition of the first and last lines as well as hinting of it in the middle with the word “gone”.

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      1. ladyleemanila

        thank you, Frank 🙂

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    7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)

      Yes aloud in a whisper is excellent

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      1. ladyleemanila

        glad you like it, Björn 🙂

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    8. Victoria Young

      Makes me think of the adage – we don’t appreciate what we have until it’s gone. Very well written.

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      1. ladyleemanila

        that’s true, Victoria 🙂

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    9. Iris

      “I used to have what he hath” … This is the part that makes me want to know more of the story.

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      1. ladyleemanila

        thank you, Iris 🙂

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    10. rosemawrites

      heartbreakingly beautiful, Lady Lee. ❤

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      1. ladyleemanila

        thank you, Rosema 🙂

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        1. rosemawrites

          you’re welcome, Lady!

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    11. Grace

      I specially like this part: aloud in a whisper – be gone!

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      1. ladyleemanila

        thank you, Grace 🙂

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    12. paul scribbles

      aloud in a whisper for me too…just a great way to pair of those opposites.

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      1. ladyleemanila

        thank you, Paul 🙂

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    13. erbiage

      This is beautiful, though I don’t think I understand. It plays to my heart, and left my mind behind

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      1. ladyleemanila

        just playing with words, I guess…

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    14. whimsygizmo

      I love “aloud in a whisper” – such a juxtaposition here. “a loud, in a whisper”
      perfect.

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      1. ladyleemanila

        cheers 🙂

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