It was the day you said hello
First thing in the morning that was
The lab you were about to show
We were introduced, then a pause
First thing in the morning that was
I was the new girl in the lab
We were introduced, then a pause
City was a bit of a drab
I was the new girl in the lab
And you were such a gentleman
City was a bit of a drab
You showed it to me like a fan
And you were such a gentleman
Showered me all your attention
You showed it to me like a fan
With friends, we had a lot of fun
Showered me all your attention
Till the last day of the training
With friends, we had a lot of fun
And from a distance, love we bring
Till the last day of the training
Two years later we got married
And from a distance, love we bring
After thirty years, love we lead
Two years later we got married
The lab you were about to show
After thirty years, love we lead
It was the day you said hello*
(c) ladyleemanila 2017
* The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.
The design is simple:
Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4
Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8
Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanzathen repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.
Last stanza:
Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza
For: Music Prompt # 74 – “A Thousand Years”by Christina Perri – Valentine’s Day Special, Day 10 #Loveuary – Finding You/Flame #writephoto, OpenLinkNight #189 by Grace, Share Your Love Story
20 responses to “Music Prompt # 74 – “A Thousand Years”by Christina Perri – Valentine’s Day Special”
Pantoums are are tough forms, but yours is penned wonderfully. Much enjoyed.
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thank you, Raivenne 🙂
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Sounds like a true love story…..the best kind 🙂
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awww thanks, C.C. 🙂
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A sweet story and nice pantoum.
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our lab story, thanks, Rosemary 🙂
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Happy endings are my favorites, smiles ~ Glad it worked out well and thanks for sharing ~
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happy to share, Grace 🙂 thank you ❤
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The repetitions just make it more effective… love the story of yours… and congrats.
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cheers, Björn 🙂 glad you like it!
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Wow…fabulous form…love the romantic thread running through this.
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thanks, Paul 🙂
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I like how it started and ended it with “the day you said hello”. I also like the pictures of the shadows of the couple.
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thank you, Frank 🙂
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Whistles!!!❤️💖This is absolutely gorgeous writing 😀 I love the sense of romance and emotion.. sigh especially love; “Showered me all your attention till the last day of the training. With friends, we had a lot of fun and from a distance, love we bring” Beautifully penned. Thank you so much for participating at Music Prompt at MLMM ❤️💖
Lots of love,
Sanaa
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awww cheers, Sanaa 🙂 always my pleasure ❤
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What a great story in a pantoum! Romantic without being at all sickly sweet or twee.
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thank you, Marinasofia 🙂
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Wonderful pictures, poem and post! Thank you !<3
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my pleasure, Ritu 🙂
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