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That was the world that never was
They knew it wouldn’t work because
It was too late and all the clause
Forget the flaws, forget the flaws
They were both in heaven at first
Have each other quenching their thirst
They went through some storms and cloudburst
And they were cursed, and they were cursed
The death of “them” and so be it
Not meant to relish the moonlit
Trust was broken so they quit
Thus they admit, thus they admit*
(c) ladyleemanila 2017
* The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael Walker. Each stanza contains four lines in monorhyme. Each line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight syllables. What makes the monotetra so powerful as a poetic form, is that the last line contains two metrical feet, repeated. It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or as many as desired.
Stanza Structure:
Line 1: 8 syllables; A1
Line 2: 8 syllables; A2
Line 3: 8 syllables; A3
Line 4: 4 syllables, repeated; A4, A4
10 responses to “Tale Weaver #126 – Death – 29/6/17”
Incredible poem! The last stanza in particular is so meaningful… “Trust was broken so they quit… Thus they admit, thus they admit.” It only enhances the powerful moral that we must keep fighting for those we love.
I recently attempted the ‘Monotetra’, so I know what a challenging form it is to write. Nevertheless, you captured its essence quite masterfully! My own ‘Monotetra’ is linked below… I’d love it if you would look over it and leave me some tips on how to improve. Thanks!
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thank you, Ananya 🙂 your monotetra is perfect as it is! ❤
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Thanks!
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Nicely done. I like the form
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thank you 🙂
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Lovely response Lady Lee, thanks for contributing to the Tale Weaver this week.
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my pleasure, Michael 🙂
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This form reads exquisitely.
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thank you, Ellen 🙂
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Nicely done.
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