Remember this one lovely, lonely soul?

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THIS WEEK’S WORDS come from “People Like Us” by Robert Bly: confused, insomniac, wrong, dial, remember, lonely, soul, college, cleanses, thief, defender, hear

Remember this one lovely, lonely soul?
We used to be in college together
Still confused about things as she stroll
She dialled his number, there was no answer
“What’s wrong with me?” herself she can’t console
Just to hear his voice even if he errs
Couldn’t sleep, becoming an insomniac
Like a thief in the night, she wants him back

The trees around cleanse her mind, made her calm
She knows she herself is her defender
Be unruffled like a reader of a psalm
And in her life, she is the sole author
For brighter future she has no qualm*

(c) ladyleemanila 2017

* A Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octives. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme:

one octive poem. abababcc
two octive poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octive poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

For: 100 Word Wednesday – Week 19, Whirligig 112 by Magical Mystical Teacher , OpenLinkNight #196 by Grace

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32 Comments

  1. For tomorrow’s dVerse Form for All I wrote a prompt on ottava rima. Your post gave me the idea that this form is worth considering. I don’t think we’ve done it before.

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  2. Lovely lines as always! My favorite line is, “She knows she herself is her defender” — defiance is also what i saw in her. Quiet, still, beautiful defiance….am I can’t say I’m not enamored with her stance ❤ Thank you so much for joining us this week 🙂

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  3. I’d love to see what this poem would look like when broken out of the form. I think it could be more concise when you’re not bending sentences around improbably to try and make the rhyme.

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  4. Girl, you are giving me major chills with that song. I have always loved it/him. Whew. gorgeous.

    “Like a thief in the night, she wants him back” … My favorite line of your poem.

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