
Visions of empty room
The love used to blossom
And the moon was promised
Hope came but left too soon
He’s not being honest
Visions of empty room
Started with smoke now fire
And water can’t stop it
And he left, just like that
We thought, it’s best to split
Visions of empty room
No matter what I do
No matter where I look
Pieces of him still there
Like my world was shook
Visions of empty room
And with the help of time
I’ll be brave and move on
He’ll just be ghost and gone
I look forward to dawn*
(c) ladyleemanila 2022
- The Monchielle is a poem that consists of four five-line stanzas where the first line repeats in each verse. Each line within the stazas consist of six syllables, and lines three and five rhyme. The rhyme pattern is Abcdc Aefgf Ahiji Aklml.
- The Monchielle form was created by Jim T. Henriksen.

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Ommigosh, Lady Lee – I love this! And thank you for introducing me to new [to me] form!
Sincerely,
David
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so glad you love this, David 🙂
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I love the last line! Great poem, Lady Lee! 🙂
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thank you, Yvette 🙂
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So lovely and evocative, Ladylee 💕🙂
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thank you 🙂
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This is a lovely form, Lady Lee. Lost love born of fire and water. ❤
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thank you, Colleen ❤
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Nice!
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thank you, Reena 🙂
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