Ladyleemanila

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October 17: Story Challenge in 99-words – “I see the light in you”

ladyleemanila

by the light of the moon
you and me in trance
in your arms I swoon
after all the dance

you and me in trance
as we rock with the boat
after all the dance
together we’re afloat

as we rock with the boat
ring in hand you kneeled
together we’re afloat
tears in eyes I yield

ring in hand you kneeled
the moon as our witness
tears in eyes I yield
grateful for life’s sweetness

fly me to the moon
harvest moon like a dream
together we dance
feeling the chills in our bones
gorgeous night with you

(c) ladyleemanila

For: https://carrotranch.com/2022/10/17/october-17-story-challenge-in-99-words/

8 responses

  1. D. Avery @shiftnshake

    I was curious about the form too, so glad to now know it as a pantoum. It worked well here and there is much light!

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    1. ladyleemanila

      thanks, yes, a pantoum and the last stanza is sort of haiku/tanka 🙂

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  2. pedometergeek

    A pantoum? Whether not it is, it is a light-filled poem.

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    1. ladyleemanila

      yes, a pantoum, thanks 🙂

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      1. pedometergeek

        I thought I recognized the form’s repetition. I’ve never written one, but my husband has written several. I’m glad you did. ~nan

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  3. Sadje

    Beautiful

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    1. ladyleemanila

      thanks, Sadje 🙂

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      1. Sadje

        You’re welcome

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