Come quickly!

bus
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come
quickly
accident
I need your help
that was a strange call
coming from my old aunt
on the other side of town
I’ve got to change and catch the bus
I hope to catch the bus at this time
and I was gone, worrying about her
she’s my mum’s sister and her husband died
I promise my mum to check on her
every now and then I get this
but there was really nothing
I can’t pretend it’s fun
life is not easy
and I arrived
she’s alright
oh well
tough!*

(c) ladyleemanila 2017

* The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1. Get creative and write an Etheree with more than one verse, but follow suit with an inverted syllable count.

Reversed Etheree: 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1

Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1

For: FLASH FICTION FOR THE PURPOSEFUL PRACTITIONER- 2017: Week 31

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8 responses

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  2. luckyjc007

    Great suspenseful story, and the tension felt while reading it. 🙂

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  3. athling2001

    Great story. Tension build well until the final twist!

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    1. ladyleemanila

      cheers, Athling 🙂

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  4. Susan

    Lovely poem. You make it work well.

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    1. ladyleemanila

      thank you, Susan 🙂

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  5. Kalpana Solsi

    a little story woven into an Etheree. I will try my hand at it.
    http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/08/prisoners.html

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    1. ladyleemanila

      I’m sure you’ll weave a story, too! thank you, Kalpana 🙂

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