passing by the cracked ice on sea
sun sets on this blue world
sailing on the water bleakly
climate change, what we hurled
what have we done, everything’s changed
the whole thing appears misarranged
what have we done?
what have we done?
like a couple being estranged
passing by the cracked ice on sea
on my own with my boat
don’t know why you left me, I’m free
and I’m keeping afloat
what have I done, you can’t forgive?
have to put into perspective
what have I done?
what have I done?
harsh destiny I have to live
passing by the cracked ice on sea
as all my years unfold
I have been through life adversely
different phases being scrolled
what must I do, to be content?
with my sins I start to repent
what must I do?
What must I do?
adjust my life how it was meant*
(c) ladyleemanila 2016
* The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8
For: Thursday Photo Prompt – Cracked Ice #writephoto by Sue Vincent, Photo-Fiction #66 by Random Michelle, OpenLinkNight #185 by Grace
26 responses to “Thursday Photo Prompt – Cracked Ice #writephoto”
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Beautiful, Lady Lee…and an unusual form too!
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thank you, Sue 🙂 glad you like it ❤
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Interesting form, and you did it proud.
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many thanks, Susan 🙂
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Sounds like a song, sang in a melodic yet at the same time ghastly voice. I love the gradation that the repetition offers, same sentence but the journey continues.
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thank you, Oloriel 🙂 have a lovely weekend!
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Likewise!
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This is one of your best… I can feel how thin the ice is…maybe that’s the risk we have to take… but it could be the last we do.
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many thanks, Björn 🙂 your kind words mean a lot to me, have a great weekend!
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The fragility and sense of cold pervading the soul really comes through this wonderful poem
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awww really appreciate what you said, Jae 🙂
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A challenging form to try LadeyLee ~ I specially like the refrain of :passing by the cracked ice on sea ~
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thanks, Grace 🙂 it was challenging but I love it ❤
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This is incredible!❤️
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cheers, Sanaa ❤
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Beautiful imagery.
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many thanks, Neel 🙂
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Lovely images you have created Lady Lee….
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thanks, Michael 🙂 Happy Friday!
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Excellent!
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thank you, Ellen 🙂
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No ! The pleasure was all mine. 😇
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This is really beautiful
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awww thanks, Robbie 🙂
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