Thursday photo prompt: Guardian #writephoto

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THIS WEEK’S WORDS come from “Potatoes” by Lucy Adkins: potatoes, dashed, truck, bounty, grace, flyaway, three, scatter, shoulder, lanes, perhaps, grateful

Time when he used to pick up potatoes
Land’s End eating fish stick in the eighties
Him Indoors! Him Indoors! His youth
Dashed to the truck and that’s the truth
For its bounty Cornwall is the best place
Him Indoors perhaps grateful for the grace

Three summer years he would go to Cornwall
Gather up the wood, anything at all
Flyaway! Flyaway! To lanes
His shoulders ache, forget the pains
To the sea on his free day hence
Flyaway from home to gain experience*

(c) ladyleemanila 2020

* The Staccato, created by Jan Turner, consists of two or more 6-line stanzas.

Rhyme scheme: a,a,b,b,c,c
*Required internal rhyme scheme interplay between line #1 and line #2 (see below explanation and examples).

Meter: 10, 10, 8, 8, 10, 10

Repeats: This form requires a 2-syllable repeat in Lines #3 and #6 as specified below.

As in a musical notation, The Staccato poetry form uses short repeats which are abruptly disconnected elements. The repeat words are read as rapid-fire speech, such as staccato music when played or sung. This form lends itself to strong emotion or instruction (i.e. military poems: “Charge on! Charge on!” etc.), a declaration (such as of an event: “We’re married! We’re married!” etc.), an instruction or emphasis of human emotion (such as love, hate, longing: “Be mine! Be mine!” etc.), strong observation (such as “Those eyes! Those eyes!” etc.) or any similar situation where a strong staccato repeat is desired.

The emphatic two-syllable repeat in this poetry form is written twice, consecutively, at the beginning of Line #3 (each repeat in Line #3 is followed by an exclamation mark), and once again at the beginning of Line #6 (with or without an exclamation mark in Line #6).

Also, Line #2 requires an internal rhyme scheme that rhymes with a word within Line #1, usually falling on the 6th syllable (see examples below), but can fall earlier in those two lines as long as the internal rhyme matches the syllabic stress in both lines.

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